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1、9月25日周考 作文讲评,情景作文 （2010届东城一模）,假设你是李华，光明中学的学生。 国庆期间你参加了社区居委会组织的社区服务活动。请你按照图片顺序，以“Community Service”为题，向学校英文校刊投稿，介绍这次活动情况。 注意： 1文章开头已为你写好 2词数不少于60 3参考词汇：sports facilities体育设施,国庆快乐,审题,一、审文字 文体：记叙文 结构：第一段：背景（时间、地点、人物） 第二段：叙述完整的活动过程 第三段：抒发感受、感想等 时态：叙事：一般过去时 感想：一般现在时 人称：I/we 标题：Community Service 提示词：sport
2、s facilities,in the morning, gather together visit the old peoples houses do through clean-ups. chat with sweep the the floor clean the window. go outside clean the sports facilities communitys park. do sth in high spirits dirt on the facilities. afternoon, go to the lawn pick up litter and garbage
3、on the grass. plastic bags threw into the nearby garbage cans. come to an end, put up decorations the bulletin board hang up big posters with the wish “Happy National Day” be proud of take part in the community service. gain much pleasure from .,写作技巧（结构）,自然分段 叙事顺序： 以时间为顺序： On the first day,on the se
4、cond day,on the third/fourth day, In the morning, later on,after lunch,., in the afternoon, 以活动为顺序： First, then., afterward, finally To start with, then, ,in the end,写作技巧（图片）,P1:注意： 人物代表性： 老奶奶-社区老人（无人照顾） 学生-社区学生,包括I（不点名道姓） 活动表达： onethe rest/somewhile others Girls.while boys such as cleaning the floo
5、r, wiping the windows and sweeping the floor. did,did, and did Not only did we clean, but we also chatted with the old.,写作技巧（图片）,P2/3:用词准确 健身中心： sports center/exercise center training center/the square where people do exercise 清洁健身器材： clean/clean up/clear up/givea through cleaning (wash不太准确) 捡拾垃圾：pi
6、ck up the litter/garbage/trash/wastes/rubbish 草地上：on the grass/lawn,写作技巧（图片）,P4: 细节表达 装扮： decorate/redecorate the community 挂“国庆快乐”横幅： put up a banner/poster/flagwith a slogan “Happy National Day” on it 布置橱窗： renew/decorate the bulletin board with greetings/DIY signs/pictures/paintings,-难忘的经历；责任感增强，
7、服务意识/社区意识增强；能力得到锻炼等） 个人收获： -After a whole day of work, my body was washed out, but my heart was filled with satisfaction. It gave me a big relief that I could do something for our city. -This unforgettable volunteer work not only brings me great pride and happiness but also inspires me that helping
8、others is kind of things full of enjoyment.,写作技巧（感受）,活动启发： -Our service is not only for our community, but also a small gift to our country. -All for one；one for all. Should we devote ourselves to volunteer work to make the world a better place for others as well as for us ourselves? -We were all in
9、 high spirits that day; we gained not only enjoyment but also a message from the community service that the harmony of our community needs everyones effort.,写作技巧（感受）,lonely/alone the old/seniors do some cleaning/sweeping/wiping to ones surprise heart-heartily on the grass/lawn at the end/by the end/
10、in the end on the first day hang-hanged/hung-hanged/hung take-took taken；throw-threw-thrown catch-caught-caught；last-last-last lie-lay-lain society/nature/the environment/government,写作技巧（语言）,Sample： Community Service During the vacation, the students in our class joined in a meaningful activity in w
11、hich all of us did our bit for the community. First we went to visit an old lady who lived all alone. While we were in her home, one of us chatted with her and the rest helped do a thorough cleaning. We swept the floor and dusted the table. When the work was done, the house looked really neat and ti
12、dy then we went to the sports center, where different sports facilities needed polishing. We set out to work at once. In no time everything was dust-free. To make the environment clean, we also picked up the litter on the grass and along the paths. To celebrate the National Day, we put up decoration
13、s on the billboard and a poster with the characters Happy National Day on it. Having done all these, we saw a more pleasant community. Tired as we were, we felt happy as all of our work paid off.,Early in the morning, we gathered together and visited the old peoples houses to do through clean-ups. S
14、ome of us chatted with granny while others swept the table, the floor and the window. Then we went outside to clean the sports facilities in our communitys park. Though the work was tough, we did it in high spirits as we cleaned up all the dirt on the facilities. In the afternoon, we went to the law
15、n and picked up all the litter and garbage on the grass. We picked them up in plastic bags and threw them into the nearby garbage cans. As the day came to an end, we put up decorations on the bulletin board and hung up big posters with the wish “Happy National Day” on them. I was proud of myself for
16、 taking part in the community service. I gained much pleasure from volunteering and helping others.,高三1班 Community Service During the National Holidays, . On the first day of the holiday, I gathered a few of my classmates, visited an old granny who lived alone and did a thorough cleaning in her hous
17、e. Some cleaned the doors and tables; some swept the floor, while I made a cup of hot tea and chatted with her happily. And we plastered a big poster with a Chinese character “Fu” on the wall, wishing her a wonderful holiday. On the next day, we cleaned the whole set of sports facilities in our comm
18、unity and we were cheerful to see it became brand new. In the afternoon, we had all the garbage picked up in the garden. Once collecting in the plastic bag, we threw them into a dustbin. Finally, on the last day, we redecorated the whole community, putting up posters with “Happy National Day” on the
19、m, delivering the best wishes to all our neighbors. Exhausted but delighted, I spent such a meaningful holiday by devoting myself to the voluntary work. I found it truly worthwhile and determined to do so in the coming winter holidays.,During the National Holidays, . In the morning, we visited the h
20、ome of an old lady to keep her company. The girls chatted with her cheerfully, while the boys swept the floor and wiped the furniture. Then we gathered at the exercise center and took out rags and buckets to give the sport facilities a thorough cleaning. The work was tiring, no doubt, but also satis
21、fying once we saw the equipments shining like brand-new again. After a quick lunch, we spread out to pick up the litter strewn over the lawns, remembering to sort out the recyclable, of course! Finally, we put up pictures and wrote down holiday greetings on the notice board as to brighten up the com
22、munity. We even made a large banner wishing everyone a happy National Day! I think we all learned to give back to our community and help make it a nicer place to live in. It has certainly been a memorable activity.,高三理 Community Service During the National Holidays, To start with, we dropped in on a
23、n old lady, who lived alone, helping her clean up her house, as well as chatting with her in order to make her happy. After that, we devoted ourselves to cleaning the sport facilities in the community. Having finished it, we noticed that some rubbish spread out in the garden nearby, which entirely r
24、uined the beauty of the community. So we headed to pick them up without hesitation. To make this activity more meaningful, we came up with an idea to decorate the community, putting up a banner with “Happy National Day”. Tired as we were, we were all satisfied with our job. What a sense of accomplishment did I gain from this activity!,